DID YOU KNOW THAT HAVING THE FASTEST TIME IN A MARATHON DOESN’T MAKE YOU THE WINNER? AS STRANGE AS IT SOUNDS, ONE WOMAN WAS SURPRISED TO HEAR THIS AFTER RUNNING IN THE NIKE WOMEN’S MARATHON, SUNDAY IN SAN FRANCISCO.
24-YEAR-OLD ARIEN O’CONNEL (O-CON-ULL) BEAT HER OWN RECORD TIME AS WELL AS EVERYONE ELSE’S BUT DIDN’T HEAR HER NAME ANNOUNCED AT THE TROPHY CEREMONY. RACE OFFICIALS TOLD HER THAT HER TIME DIDN’T COUNT BECAUSE SHE HADN’T CLASSIFIED HERSELF AS AN ELITE RUNNER. THE ELITE GROUP HAD A 20-MINUTE HEAD START SO TECHNICALLY SHE WASN’T IN THE SAME RACE AS THEM. THE FIFTH GRADE TEACHER HAD THE BEST TIME BUT MADE THE INNOCENT MISTAKE OF NOT RUNNING WITH THE RIGHT GROUP. SHE MODESTLY ADMITTED: "I'm a good, solid runner. I never considered myself elite."
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Your lead takes a good approach, but it's too long. Here's how I'd edit it:
HAVING THE FASTEST TIME IN A MARATHON DOESN’T ALWAYS MAKE YOU THE WINNER. THAT'S WHAT ONE WOMAN FOUND OUT AFTER RUNNING IN TODAY'S NIKE WOMEN’S MARATHON IN SAN FRANCISCO.
THE FASTEST RUNNER, 24-YEAR-OLD ARIEN O’CONNEL (O-CON-ULL) BEAT HER OWN RECORD....
Second paragraph is also too long. Break it up.
Hangs a bit at the end. Needs a closing.
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